Director Zhang has reached the pinnacle in the control of the picture and artistic conception, but in terms of character setting, story advancement, and logical details, his skills are lacking. For a science student who likes brain-burning sci-fi and meticulous American dramas, I can't stand the bumps and abrupt emotional lines in the film, so I dare to write and change it myself. Be forewarned, there will be spoilers! It is suitable for spectators who have already watched the film to come and taste it together. I only write about the places that conflict with the film, and others still use the characters and events in the film.
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1. Brother and Sister Pei Wang (I like them both, they deserve more plump characters)
The late emperor passed away early, and the brothers and sisters of King Pei had nothing to rely on, and could only rely on each other for life. The Ziyu family has been a powerful minister of Peiguo for generations, and the power is in the hands, and the power dominates the government and the opposition. Especially when Zi Yu's father and uncle were in the governorship of Dadu, King Pei's brothers and sisters were still young, so they could only look up to him. King Pei is obedient to Qingping and loves him very much. Qingping did not like red makeup since she was a child, she liked to dance with knives and swords. King Pei searched for masters for him and taught him martial arts. Qingping showed amazing martial arts talent. She started martial arts at the age of 6 and changed 5 teachers in 10 years.
At the beginning, King Pei also practiced martial arts with Qingping, but his ambition was not here, and his martial arts progress was mediocre. King Pei specializes in imperial power. From the age of 8, as he grows older, he gradually gathers power, and the throne becomes increasingly stable. As King Pei gradually became an adult and his momentum grew, the rebels kept fighting back, trying to kill King Pei. When King Pei was an adult, the rebels launched a mutiny in the palace, and more than ten masters stormed into the final palace of King Pei. When the crisis was like eggs, Qingping led a small team of personal guards to complete the counter-kill. With ghostly steps, ingenious hidden weapons, fierce close combat, and familiarity with the terrain, Qingping became the most frightening killer that night. Qingping was 16 years old that year. Since then, Qingping has become Pei Wang's most trusted and sharpest sword. In one year, three ministers who gathered to oppose King Pei died unexpectedly. Under the wing of her brother for many years, Qingping finally has the ability to protect her brother and his throne. This - is to live with each other!
(The above plot is more suitable for inserting in the form of flashback)
(Master Lu brought back the scene of Yang Ping taking a concubine token)
Lord Lu said that Yang Ping proposed a two-way strategy, and when he took out the token, King Pei said: It is not impossible to consider.
Qing Ping was shocked. It was no longer the familiar eldest brother in front of him. He was King Pei who only cared about the throne. In fact, this is just the interests of King Pei. King Pei really loves this sister - the only close relative in this world. Later King Pei also hinted: Your move is fake. King Pei wanted to take advantage of Ziyu's plan to recover Jingzhou and get rid of his confidants. Many words could only be kept in his heart and could not be said explicitly.
Qingping questioned King Pei: You have protected me since childhood, what happened to you today? I lost my parents when I was 5 years old. My eldest brother is like a father. It was my eldest brother who grew up with me. I didn’t like red makeup since I was a child. The rebel driver is on the side, and there may be swords and swords at any time. It is the eldest brother who has done his best to protect me. But now? I can't understand you anymore, you are not my eldest brother, my eldest brother will never give me to the enemy general as a concubine!
King Pei's heart is like a knife, but he can't show it. A good chess player can't have emotions, can't show his cards, and said cruelly: Yes, I have taken care of you for so many years, now it's time for you to pay back.
(A scene was inserted before the battle to retake Jingzhou, Qingping’s personal servant reported to King Pei: the eldest princess is gone, leaving a letter of farewell. King Pei read the letter and learned that Qingping went to Jingzhou with the surprise team, and was very anxious. Immediately order the Imperial Forest Army to go to Jingzhou together, so that the eldest princess dies in Jingzhou later, King Pei's appearance will not be abrupt, and it also reflects that King Pei's marriage is just a false move, and he really loves his sister.)
2. Zi Yu and the Shadow
(This story must be told from Zi Yu's battle with Yang Cang a year ago)
A year ago, Zi Yu's army defeated Jingzhou and fought against Yang Cang in three moves. Among them, Yang Cang's third move was dragging the knife. Yang Cang respected Ziyu, and did not kill him, but let Ziyu's subordinates rescue him. Ziyu was sent back to Peidu, and the imperial doctor made a diagnosis. He said that the injury to the skin outside the knife was minor, and the heart was seriously injured by the overbearing knife qi. He could only use precious medicinal materials to prolong his life, and there was no way to recover. It happened that the genius doctor traveled to Peidu and asked the government to see him. Ziyu's subordinates were opposed to letting the genius doctor treat the governor, because the genius doctor had saved Yang Cang. Yang Cang had been poisoned by an arrow, and happened to meet Yunyou's genius doctor, who scraped his bones to heal his wounds, saved his life, and saved his arm. Zi Yu defied the public opinion and said that he trusted the genius doctor, and he should not treat the belly of a gentleman with the heart of a villain.
The genius doctor rescued Ziyu, but he clearly stated that it was impossible to restore him to the original state, and instructed him to have three major taboos: Don't waste your mind, don't use force with others, and don't have emotional ups and downs. Ziyu worshipped the genius doctor and said gratefully: Thank the genius doctor for saving his life. The genius doctor's instructions will be kept in mind, but the duty of the great governor is Ziyu's shoulders. The genius doctor agreed. (At this time, Ziyu was bright and upright, a gentleman with magnanimity, and a veritable generation of Confucian generals)
A week after the injury, although Zi Yu was alive and well, his body was severely damaged and he began to lose weight. The genius doctor's words undoubtedly sentenced Zi Yu to "death penalty" in another sense - it is impossible to make achievements again. Xiao Ai persuaded Zi Yu to go into seclusion together. The two of them had agreed that after the political situation was stabilized and the border was stabilized, they would ride horses and lakes together and live a life of idle clouds and wild cranes. Zi Yu refused, taking back Jingzhou and taking revenge on Yang Cang had become his obsession, so he decided to use Shadow.
The first time the shadow appears, Zi Yu examines and teaches him. Shadow not only looks like Ziyu in appearance and stature, but also has six or seven levels of martial arts, and he knows the court situation like the back of the hand. Zi Yu was satisfied and made wounds for him with his own hands. Zi Yu has been fighting all year round, and he has more than ten wounds on his body, especially the newly added stab wound on his chest. He has to do all of them again. Shadow is miserable and perseveres with a strong will. (ps, influenced by "Chasing the Murderer in the White Night", it's not enough to do one stab wound, you have to do a full set) (insert a sentence, in the movie Zi Yu makes a wound for the shadow, Zi Yu asks the shadow to shout out, but the shadow Talking about his background. In my opinion, such a blunt account of the background of the characters is really lame, second only to the use of narration.)
Zi Yu began to escape into the dark, and the shadow began to appear. First of all, he was adapting to life in Fuzhong. Xiao Ai explained the big and small matters in the mansion to the shadow, respected him in front of others, and took good care of him as a wounded person. Shadow lost her parents when she was young, and has been living in a dark corner, where has she been taken care of by others? For Shadow, secretly watching Xiao Ai as a female celebrity is the happiest daily life. Xiao Ai has the warmth of a mother and is also the object of Shadow's first crush. Xiao Ai noticed something strange, sympathized with Shadow's tragic life, and once again proposed to Zi Yu: It is better to go into seclusion together and let Shadow be free. Zi Yu has lived in the dark for more than half a month, his temperament has changed, he is angry with Xiao Ai, and gnashing his teeth, he must take back Jingzhou and take revenge.
A month after the injury, it was approaching the founding ceremony of Peiguo. King Pei received a report from the imperial doctor, saying that Zi Yu was in good health, and he had doubts in his heart. The person who was incapable of recovering suddenly recovered quickly. It is said that the swordsman of Yang Cangdao was either dead or disabled. Is the genius doctor really so talented? King Pei invited Ziyu and his wife to a celebration banquet.
At the celebration banquet, King Pei suddenly attacked and asked Ziyu and his wife to play the piano and the chorus to add to the fun of the banquet. Shadow has never practiced the piano, and it is even more impossible for him to reconcile with the little Aiqin, so he is resolutely unwilling. King Pei was angry. Xiao Ai took the dagger of the eldest princess beside him and swore an oath of severed fingers. Seeing Xiao Ai's decision, King Pei was worried that things might get bigger, so he could only give up and instead wanted to apply medicine for Zi Yu. Seeing more than ten wounds on Shadow's body, the stab wound on his chest was even more terrifying, King Pei slightly dispelled his doubts.
After the banquet, Shadow and Xiao Ai returned from the palace, guarded by the Royal Forest Army, and encountered an assassin on the way. (Zi Yu's family tried to secure King Pei's accession to the throne, and offended many people. He used to be jealous of Zi Yu's bravery, but now his serious injuries have not healed. He took his wife with him, which is a good time to assassinate.) Wang had already received rumors about this assassination, and wanted to use a knife to kill. Shadow stepped forward to protect Xiao Ai, and was injured in many places. The two took advantage of a hidden cave on the cliff to get rid of the assassin. Shadow lost too much blood and almost fainted. Xiao Ai was afraid that he would not wake up and asked him to talk with her. First, the shadow said about his life experience, vague impressions of his hometown and his mother, and hoped to live a peaceful and stable life. Then Xiao Ai said how he and Zi Yu met and knew each other, and agreed to live in seclusion in the mountains and live happily together. Finally, when Shadow couldn't hold it any longer, Zi Yu's personal soldiers came over.
After this incident, Ziyu found that King Pei was doubting and testing himself, and asked Shadow to practice the piano. Xiao Ai taught Shadow how to practice the piano. Although Shadow can't play the piano, he can easily understand Xiao Ai's piano sound. Infected by the beauty in the sound of the piano, Shadow learns the piano very hard and makes rapid progress. Slowly, Xiao Ai can also read the sound of the shadow's piano, which is another peaceful and beautiful picture (the picture is colorful, the rural life of men farming and women weaving). After practicing the piano for many times, the two gradually became connected with each other, and the ensemble came naturally.
What Xiao Ai was most worried about happened. She found that she couldn't help feeling for the shadow. She was a little flustered and asked Zi Yu again: Can you let go of everything, and the two of them can live the beautiful life they once hoped for together. Zi Yu was in pain and decadence, and frankly confessed to Xiao Ai: his health was deteriorating, the two have never had children, and it may never be possible in the future. Xiao Ai expressed her intentions: I don't care about these, as long as I can be with Zi Yu, watching the sunrise and the wind rise, the flowers bloom and the leaves fall, I will be very content. But Zi Yu refused, and said viciously: He must take back everything that belongs to him. Xiao Ai was saddened.
The shadow role was very successful, and Zi Yu's plan was progressing smoothly.
Tian Zhan came to visit and said that King Pei was cowardly, forbearance and unworthy of being a king. This remark hit Zi Yu's heart, and Zi Yu roughly revealed to Tian Zhan his plan to seize Jingzhou and Peiguo. While Zi Yu was talking, Xiao Ai, who was beside him, heard him. After Tian Zhan left, Xiao Ai tried to persuade Zi Yu: Have you forgotten the doctor's instructions? Don't you want your life? Zi Yu's temperament has changed so much that he doesn't listen at all. Xiao Ai looked at Zi Yu as if she was looking at someone she didn't know at all. The person she loved in front of her was so unfamiliar.
When Zi Yu's plan came to the last minute, he let the shadow arrange it and deliberately leaked the surprise attack to Qingping. (You can insert a scene. A year ago, before the Jingzhou War, Qingping killed more than ten rebel masters and became famous in the first battle. King Pei wanted to test Ziyu's martial arts and asked Qingping to propose a competition with Ziyu. Ziyu Using a gun, stretching eighteen moves is a unique skill from the family. Qingping uses a sword to pursue speed, accuracy and ruthlessness. At first, Ziyu was forced by Qingping to be very embarrassed. After 5 moves, he gradually gained the upper hand and finally won Qingping. Afterwards, Qingping told Pei Wang: Outside of 5 moves, it is impossible for him to win Ziyu. But if he kills the killer and adds hidden weapons, he has a chance to win within 5 moves. This battle makes Pei Wang know, but he Unexpectedly, this battle made Ziyu feel jealous of Qingping, and a year later, Qingping fell into Ziyu's plan.) Qingping is the substantive leader of the Imperial Forest Army, and she is very skilled in martial arts. Qingping was very afraid, and just took advantage of Yang Ping's humiliation to lead Qingping to participate in the surprise attack. Even if Qingping survived, she arranged for someone to hold her back so that she could successfully seize the throne.
The shadow left to reveal his feelings to Xiao Ai, and Xiao Ai presented the wound medicine. After the shadow left, Xiao Ai found Zi Yu and said that everything was going well, seeing that her wish was about to be fulfilled, and she hoped to sing a song together.
The two began to play the piano and the ensemble, (insert, in the play, Sun Li played too hard, Xiao Ai should play in a relaxed and natural state, with a heaven and earth in her chest, even if the music is intense, it should be the pleasure of the horses and rivers and lakes , it shouldn't be sonorous and powerful) The two played together to the climax, Xiao Ai's strings broke and Xiao Ai vomited blood. Zi Yu asked Xiao Ai with concern. Xiao Ai got up with a wry smile, turned to leave, and muttered to herself: I played Sizhu, but you played Jin Ge, how could it be continuous? How can it be constant? (The world's best qin, se and ming, but now they are eccentric and detached, running in the opposite direction)
After the shadow killed Yang Cang, he took out the kit from Xiao Ai, used Jinchuang medicine to heal his wounds, and found his hometown along the way he remembered. The assassin pretended to be his mother, which was Zi Yu's last killer move for Shadow. (The fact that his mother was killed in the film is really superfluous. After searching for someone who has been missing for many years, how could he just find it. Even if he is found, it would be better to kill the shadow with his mother in hand, so why did he kill him? Too many unreasonable) Shadow, who was seriously injured, once again took out the kit sent by Xiao Ai and used the golden wound medicine to heal the wound.
3. The last climax
In the palace hall, King Pei repelled the others, leaving only King Pei, Shadow, Xiao Ai, and the Masked Guard in the hall. (Insert a sentence, Shadow should not come back in ragged clothes, it is very unreasonable in terms of emotion and reason. At this time, although he is not the governor, he is an important piece of King Pei, and he must be wrapped up first and return in a commoner. As far as he is concerned, the only hope for returning is Xiao Ai, for Xiao Ai, he must take good care of himself, otherwise his wounds are all over his body, and the blood will be gone)
King Pei held the saber in his hand and was about to open the wooden box. When he was about to hit the wooden box, he was alert and ducked to one side. The original fatal sword of the mask guard stabbed King Pei in the right shoulder and the saber fell to the ground. King Pei pulled out the personal dagger from his arms with his left hand, rolled to the side, put the dagger on Xiao Ai's neck, and took her as a hostage. All this was in the flash of light, and Shadow and Xiao Ai didn't react at all. King Pei said to the mask guard fiercely: It seems that I still underestimated you.
The mask guard laughed, took off his mask, and said: I also underestimated you, you are no longer the little boy who held his sister's hand and knelt in front of my house to seek shelter. Your heart's plans are beyond mine. Tell me, how did you see the flaws?
King Pei laughed proudly: I sent my guards to kill the Grand Governor, but isn't there a Grand Governor sitting on top of this hall? You're not surprised at all, you don't even ask a question. Now your wife is in my hands, and I can keep you together. Zi Yu smiled gloomily: I lived in darkness for a year, and I was waiting for this day, and I was just one step away, and I succeeded. What are you kidding me for? I want to get back everything that belongs to me! She is my woman, and it is her duty to die for me. You do it!
Xiao Ai shed tears, and the last trace of affection for Zi Yu disappeared.
King Pei turned to the shadow and said: He is the one who deceived you in the name of your mother and killed you. Now that he is seriously injured (Zi Yu killed the guard and was already seriously injured), your chance to take revenge has come. Kill him for me, and you are the Grand Governor.
Shadow picked up the saber from the ground, glanced at Xiao Ai, turned around and wanted to walk towards Zi Yu, suddenly stepped back and stabbed out with a sword, at the same time, Xiao Ai dodged and stabbed into King Pei's belly. middle. This time, it was King Pei's turn to look puzzled, he clearly had the chance to win, why suddenly... Shadow and Ziyu both knew in their hearts that King Pei made a mistake by putting the dagger on Xiao Ai's neck. This sword was made by the shadow with all his strength, and many wounds that had been bandaged on his body burst open, oozing blood. Xiao Ai looked anxious, held the shadow, looked at the shadow's eyes, and her love was naturally revealed. Pei Wang also understood where he was wrong.
Zi Yu was tortured by knife wounds for a year, and he tried to kill three masked guards before. At this time, he was at the end of his force. When he saw Xiao Ai going to help the shadow, his face flashed with a fierce look. He insisted on saying to the shadow: good! good! My uncle really did not see you wrong. You are a person who values love and righteousness. We rescued you from the chaotic army, raised you, gave you food and clothing, and taught you martial arts. Now is your time to repay your kindness, kill him for me with the sword in your hand.
Shadow moved, and with some difficulty, stopped again. Shadow is grateful to Ziyu's family, and feels guilty for having a husband and wife with Xiao Ai. Even if Ziyu goes back on his word and wants to kill himself, Shadow has never hated Ziyu, let alone revenge. (Someone in the comments suggested that the shadow actually hates Ziyu. Even if I favor the shadow and beautify him, these inner activities will not be shown in the film)
Seeing the shadow stopped, Zi Yu was a little anxious, and then said: I am obsessed with power and tricks, and I don't appreciate the beauty of the great rivers and mountains, so you take Xiao Ai, fly away, and take a good look for me. (This paragraph can refer to the lines in the film)
The shadow knows Ziyu too well. He is willing to sacrifice Xiaoai as a chess piece, but he will never allow Xiaoai to live to be someone else's woman. Ziyu's remarks show that today he and himself can only have a relationship. One person walked out of this hall. Shadow raised his sword as if he wanted to kill King Pei, and stabbed Zi Yu with his backhand sword. Zi Yu wanted to take the opportunity to sneak attack from behind, but he was a step behind (same as in the film). Shadow shot with all his strength, and the speed was very fast. The wounds on his body were completely cracked, especially the bamboo stab wound on his back and waist, which gurgled blood out, and Shadow barely held it with his hands.
The three men in the hall all fell down and were dying, only the woman was standing in white clothes. Xiao Ai's eyes turned on the three of them, and she seemed to have made up her mind weakly. She crouched down, looked at the shadow, took the sword from the shadow's hand, the shadow let go, and she took the sword. Little Ai took the sword and walked forward slowly, and the black and white around it slowly turned into color. (Since then, it's all color tone pictures)
(Next shot) The door of the main hall slowly opened, and Xiao Ai appeared at the door of the main hall with her shadow, her white clothes were stained with blood. It is still raining outside, but the green mountains and green waters have already taken on color, which is very beautiful. Xiao Ai announced loudly: King Pei was assassinated, and the assassin was killed on the spot by the Governor. The ministers rioted.
(End One)
Xiao Ai and Shadow looked at each other, and they both understood each other from each other's eyes. (global end)
(End 2)
(I feel sorry for Xiao Ai, and I can't bear to let the shadow turn black. Xiao Ai loved Ziyu so much before, and then she loves the shadow so much. One blackening of Ziyu makes her on the verge of collapse, and the shadow turns black again, it is estimated that she will go crazy. According to the end of the play, Xiao Ai looked out from the door with a look of horror, because she seemed to see the second Zi Yu turning black. So following Director Zhang's meaning, I will write another ending 2)
Xiao Ai looked up at the shadow, but the shadow did not look at her, but at Tian Zhan. Tian Zhancheng stepped forward and bowed in fear. The shadow repeated what he said to Tian Zhan before: I was your governor before, and I will still be your governor from now on. (The picture slowly returns to black and white, the end of the play)
Fourth, weapons, martial arts
There are many unreasonable places in the weapons and martial arts in the film:
first round. The movie is born out of the story of the Three Kingdoms. The theory of the round in the Three Kingdoms matches the horse war. The two sides are on horseback to hedge, and then they separate after the battle. This is called a round. There is no horse battle in the film. After the two fight, they stand apart and make moves again. They look stupid, and there is no smooth fight, which is very unpleasant to watch. Rounds must be discarded without hesitation and replaced by moves commonly used in martial arts.
Second, Pei umbrella. I don't know what weapon Zi Yu originally used, but the umbrella is a very non-mainstream weapon, difficult to master, and not conducive to the war between the two armies. Long weapons such as knives, spears, spears, and halberds should be suitable for the battlefield. Shadow's training since childhood should be similar to Zi Yu's. The two of them gave up the weapons they used to be good at, and spent a year practicing umbrellas. They also broke Yang Cang's swordsmanship, which was very unreasonable.
Third, use the figure of a woman to break the sword. Softness overcomes rigidity, water and fire overcome each other, black and white, and yin and yang are all connected, but they seem deliberate and stiff. The twisted state of the fight became the laughing point in the whole film, and this laughing point was incompatible with the style of the whole film, so it became an embarrassing point, and it was very embarrassing to watch.
To sum up, the weapons and martial arts in the film need to be rethought.
Yang family swordsmanship: The swordsmanship of the most yang and strong, three moves to defeat the enemy, each move will have several changes according to the different situation of the battle. There are flaws and loopholes in each move separately, but the three moves are connected together, echoing end to end, and it has become the most difficult swordsmanship in the world. The last move, dragging the knife, is the ultimate move. When the first two moves are dominant, drag the knife forward and become unstoppable; when the first two moves are inferior, drag the knife backward, feign defeat to lure the enemy, turn around with a knife, and turn defeat into victory.
Ziyu's Marksmanship: As mentioned earlier, the family-herited marksmanship, which stretches for 18 moves, repeats itself in cycles, is endless, and is very tenacious. As long as the first few moves are supported, it is almost invincible at the back.
Pei Umbrella: Evolved from Ziyu Spear. The handle of the gun can be retracted and the umbrella leaf can be opened to become an umbrella. Usually used as a gun, it turns into an umbrella when you need a concealed weapon or when you want to lock a knife.
How to break the sword technique: The three-stroke sword technique cannot be connected together. The umbrella leaf can be used as a hidden weapon to disrupt the rhythm and delay the sword movement. After the umbrella leaf is opened, the sword can be locked.
Several duel battles throughout the movie:
1. Qingping Zhan Ziyu (sword to gun, depending on the length of the film, can be added or not)
2. Ziyu fights against Yang Cang (gun versus sword, Yang Cang prevailed with three swords, Ziyu was defeated completely)
3. Shadow vs. Yang Cang (Umbrella vs. Knife, the climax of the fight in the show, Umbrella and gun can be switched flexibly)
4. Qing Ping vs Yang Ping (sword vs knife, Qing Ping doesn't need a umbrella, she uses the sword she is best at, the world's martial arts, only fast and unbreakable, Qing Ping's ghostly movement and strange hidden weapons, she relies on her own strength to fight against Yang Ping Yang's swordsmanship has the upper hand. Unfortunately, he was not prepared for the power of the dragged sword. Yang Ping feigned defeat and lured the enemy. Qingping rushed forward and was severely injured by the dragged sword. killed Yang Ping)
Write at the end:
Many people have left comments after reading it. No matter what their opinions are, as long as they don’t make foul language, I am very grateful. I sincerely say: Thank you. Several of them said that my story was too full and that the movie should be left blank, and I agree. Let me explain here that I wrote this from the screenwriter's point of view. I wrote down everything I could think of in detail, and then handed it over to the director and actors to choose and make the final creation. If we can really follow this script, we must have some trade-offs. Some places need to be expanded, and a sentence can be enriched into a play; some places need to be hidden, and it is vaguely interesting. It cannot be achieved with words alone.
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